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Post by lemacd on Oct 1, 2014 15:20:43 GMT
OK, the drabbles... I think they were a hit, I know I enjoyed them. I think they are a great writing practice activity. Some of you have already collected yours and put them up on Fanfiction.net and that is just great.
I thought we could kick it up a notch or two and modify the challenge a bit, expand the drabble to 300 words (no more, no less, including titles). I know that by definition it would no longer be a real drabble... but if there are fanfic police out there, they'll have to catch me first.
so to start, here are some words:
bittersweet
genuine
radio
dress
scream
so... who's down with this?
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Post by utility_singer on Oct 2, 2014 1:31:02 GMT
Oooh, me. I'll get there.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 2, 2014 5:01:10 GMT
OK, the drabbles... I think they were a hit, I know I enjoyed them. I think they are a great writing practice activity. Some of you have already collected yours and put them up on Fanfiction.net and that is just great. I thought we could kick it up a notch or two and modify the challenge a bit, expand the drabble to 300 words (no more, no less, including titles). I know that by definition it would no longer be a real drabble... but if there are fanfic police out there, they'll have to catch me first. so to start, here are some words: bittersweet
genuine
radio
dress
screamso... who's down with this? Me totally. When my real life stresses finish this weekend (damn you Chemistry!!!!), I'll return to writing and I'm come back over here and start tackling these - sorry I have been shockingly absent on Proboards for the last few weeks, sorry everyone. |
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Post by utility_singer on Oct 2, 2014 23:14:52 GMT
Apologies from me as well. I've had precious little time to get to the things I *want* to be doing this week.
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Post by patrickssong on Oct 19, 2014 21:42:11 GMT
Okay, having a crack at this right now. Feeling inspired from another story I read.
*Disclaimer* Many words may be harmed or butchered in the writing of this drabble.
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Post by patrickssong on Oct 31, 2014 13:49:15 GMT
Okay, decided to have a go at this. I honestly don't know how you ladies do the wonderful writing you do without losing it. I must have changed the damn thing about fifty times in the last hour alone.
Dress
When Georg arrived home, Maria was busy sorting clothes to donate to the Abbey. She looked up at him and smiled.
“Hello my love,” he gave Maria a kiss on the cheek and began to undo his tie.
A crash, the sound of Kurt’s name being bellowed out with indignation and a squeal unique to Gretl floated down the passageway.
“What on earth…” Maria hastily headed towards the nursery.
As he began to unbutton his shirt, Georg’s eyes drifted across the pile of clothes on the bed. He smirked as he saw it on top of the pile - the grey dress from the Abbey. He gently ran the fingers of one hand across the skirt. The material was coarse, but felt strangely comforting and warm. He could smell the faint scent of the lavender-scented soap his wife used. He glanced at the door, quickly rolled up the dress and headed towards the walk-in closet.
A few nights later, Maria was particularly pensive as she lay in Georg’s arms. “Darling?”
“Hmm?”
Maria twisted sideways to look down at him. “Why did I find my grey dress from the Abbey in your shirt drawer?”
Georg groaned as he wrapped his arm around her waist, pulling her closer and kissing her neck. “You are going to think your husband is sentimental old fool if I told you.”
“Never, Georg…”
He sighed. “Well I...I guess I realised it is everything that I fell in love with. It is you the day you arrived to change our lives. It is everything that made me feel safe enough to open my heart again.”
For a moment there was silence. All that could be heard the rain beating a soothing rhythm on the roof.
“Maria? Dar…?”
His words were halted with a passionate kiss.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 31, 2014 16:19:06 GMT
I loved this!! Well done!
And, this sentence....A crash, the sound of Kurt’s name being bellowed out with indignation and a squeal unique to Gretl floated down the passageway...DIVINE.
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Post by utility_singer on Oct 31, 2014 18:21:26 GMT
Awesome!!! Loved it. See? You're a writer!
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Post by lemacd on Oct 31, 2014 21:04:19 GMT
Perfect!!! And to answer your question... We change the damn things fifty times. At least.
More more do it again!!!!
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Post by Deleted on Oct 31, 2014 22:01:16 GMT
Oh wow! Total wow patrickssong. You are the new rock star of pro boards! That was just totally awesome. You really need to continue writing, you are really great at it. In answer to your question, like lemacd said, we do change things at least 50 times, and then even when we publish (or at least this happens to me), I'll always either find some sort of mistake/typo or think of something completely spectacular that I should have written instead and then it's too late (like the light bulb moment I had about half an hour after I published the Naughty Nun last night. Damn it!) But in all honesty, with writing, I find it does get easier and faster the more I do it. So please keep writing, I need more stories (sorry I'm being selfish, it's all about me I need new stories, and well written stories.... stat!!! lol!!!) |
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Post by patrickssong on Nov 1, 2014 9:29:15 GMT
Thank you very much for your kind words and encouragement ladies. No, I really do appreciate it. I started out with an idea, then it ended up absolutely nothing like I envisaged. I have a few ideas floating around for other potential drabbles. I have always been a bit shy about the concept of fiction writing, probably because unlike my essays, it makes me feel a little more exposed (yeah, I'm a weird little person).
But thank you for your comments and yeah, I might keep going and see where it takes me. Unlike you ladies, the only one in danger of ever catching me in the 'fan fiction act' is my cat.
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Post by patrickssong on Nov 1, 2014 9:29:48 GMT
I loved this!! Well done! And, this sentence.... A crash, the sound of Kurt’s name being bellowed out with indignation and a squeal unique to Gretl floated down the passageway...DIVINE.
Thank you very much  I really appreciate that a lot 
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Post by lemacd on Nov 1, 2014 14:27:56 GMT
patrickssong it is scary true. But you are among friends so don't be afraid that we will bite you. It's easy for me to say as I started posting stories before I met anyone or joined a community like this. I was actually shocked to get reviews. To get good reviews at that. If you want to do it though, we will be cheering.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 1, 2014 15:21:08 GMT
You're welcome! :-) I loved this!! Well done! And, this sentence.... A crash, the sound of Kurt’s name being bellowed out with indignation and a squeal unique to Gretl floated down the passageway...DIVINE.
Thank you very much I really appreciate that a lot
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Post by patrickssong on Nov 8, 2014 8:59:12 GMT
This one is so sweet, my teeth are hurting and I have diabetes. I'm going soft. Don't tell anyone.
Bittersweet
“Excuse me Captain, would you mind if I borrowed my bride for a few moments.”
“Thank you Father.” Lisel kissed him on the cheek. She gave his hand a final squeeze as she moved out of his embrace.
Georg sighed and watched his eldest daughter take the arm of her new husband. His Little Liesl. Born at a time when he was still struggling with the devastation of losing his navy and the destruction of his homeland. His new-born baby girl had coaxed him out of a melancholy as not even Agathe had been able to.
Suddenly, he was thrown off-balance as a small weight cannoned into the back of him. He quickly turned around and looked down to see his youngest daughter hugging his legs. She stood on his toes, raising her arms and reaching up to him.
“We dance, Father!”
Georg laughed and picked her up, dropping a kiss on her nose and settling her onto his hip. As he moved from side to side in a faux waltz, his eyes scanned the room. He smiled softly as they rested on each of his other eight children. They finally rested on his luminous wife, sitting on the other side of the room as she chatted to a friend. One of her hands was holding a glass of water, the other rested delicately on the swell of her stomach. She met his gaze and smiled tenderly.
Georg began to feel the weight of his daughter’s body fall further into his shoulder as she began to tire. He watched indulgently as her head began to nestle into his chest. Her tiny fingers were still clutching the back of his jacket and her long, strawberry blonde curls had fallen across his neck.
For Georg von Trapp, today was bittersweet indeed.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 8, 2014 9:30:23 GMT
patrickssong, Wow! Thank you for coming back and writing more! Very sweet indeed. That's Ok, as sometimes we all need a little bit of sweetness in our lives!!!
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Post by lemacd on Nov 8, 2014 15:20:21 GMT
*sniff* ok. Who's chopping onions..?
Excellent job. You could totally extend and make a story out of this. It's great as is. I'm just saying.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 8, 2014 16:45:03 GMT
Adorable!
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Post by patrickssong on Nov 9, 2014 5:42:17 GMT
Thank you again ladies. The funny thing is, the more you write, the more ideas pop into your head. Maybe I might have a crack at something bigger one day!!
Thank you for the kind words and encouragement.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 9, 2014 11:28:52 GMT
Thank you again ladies. The funny thing is, the more you write, the more ideas pop into your head. Maybe I might have a crack at something bigger one day!! Thank you for the kind words and encouragement. Yes, my problem. too many ideas, not enough time to write them. Please, please, please.... write more! Start with a one-shot then move onto something bigger! |
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Post by utility_singer on Nov 9, 2014 13:13:15 GMT
Thank you again ladies. The funny thing is, the more you write, the more ideas pop into your head. Maybe I might have a crack at something bigger one day!! Thank you for the kind words and encouragement. Yes, my problem. too many ideas, not enough time to write them. Please, please, please.... write more! Start with a one-shot then move onto something bigger! Truth. Yes, keep writing. Love this 'bittersweet' prompt. I've got a real soft spot for pregnant Maria. |
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Post by augiesannie on Dec 27, 2014 1:09:03 GMT
patrickssong I am late to the party but I MUST chime in to say that your drabbles were BRILLIANT.  @ |
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I really appreciate that a lot 
